堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的意志

Where There Is a Will There Is a Way
1．堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的意志是成功的重要保證。
2．意志堅(jiān)定的人才能完成偉大的使命，
3．學(xué)生也是這樣，不刻苦學(xué)習(xí)，終究不會成為有用之才用。

　Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will

沒有堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的意志將無法成功
As we have read from above, quitting-smoking seems easy, but in reality it is rarely achieved. There is something provoking and interesting in this paradox, just because sword does not wear the stone as dripping water does.

正如上面我們所讀到的，戒煙看似簡單但卻很難成功。這個(gè)論點(diǎn)上令人深思的、有趣,僅僅因?yàn)閯Σ幌袼�一樣能夠穿石�?br /> The ability to do something over and over again in a short time may imply its easiness, but in a long run, a lifetime maybe, things turn out to be quite the opposite. Also, as is often the case, one may have obtained all the tools and opportunities to achieve something, but in the end they still fail due to the will shortage.

在短時(shí)間內(nèi)可以重復(fù)做的事情可能意味著它的易性，但從長遠(yuǎn)來看，也許一輩子，事情就是完全不一樣的了。同時(shí)，通常情況下，一個(gè)人可以擁有所有實(shí)現(xiàn)一些東西的工具和機(jī)會，但最后他們還是因?yàn)槿狈σ庵径�失敗了�?br />
So how could we avoid the dilemma? Here is the prime condition of success: will and perseverance. Concentrate you energy, thought and mind exclusively on the business in which you are engaged, hang on in there and be patient, for, as Emerson put it, no one can cheat you out of your ultimate success but yourself.

那么我們怎樣才能避免這樣的困境呢？這是成功的首要條件：意志和毅力。集中你的精力想你所從事的事業(yè)，堅(jiān)持下去，要有耐心，正如愛默生所說，除了你自己沒有人能幫你取得最終的成功。

本文屬于話題類作文，只看題目 “Nothing Succeeds without a strong will”考生會覺得比較抽象，難以下手。細(xì)看題目說明中給出了提示，要求考生結(jié)合戒煙屢次不成功的幽默引語對該話題進(jìn)行分析闡述。
總體來說，這是一篇“中等偏上”的考生作文。本文先點(diǎn)題指出“堅(jiān)強(qiáng)意志”的重要性；第二段從反面舉例闡述——具體描寫了意志不堅(jiān)定者的心理活動，闡述為什么會戒煙失�。蛔詈髲慕錈熝由斓缴�活中的其他事情，并復(fù)述堅(jiān)強(qiáng)意志的內(nèi)涵，點(diǎn)題收尾。
總體上來看，文章
思路清晰，采用了生動的比喻和形象的心理描寫，語言流暢，用語地道。
但一些重復(fù)表達(dá)（如第二段和第三段中的weak will）顯得單調(diào)，可用shaky ones, weak-willed persons，the strong-willed等靈活表達(dá)。在備考中，多積累不同表達(dá)，相信會寫出更生動的文章。 在論述上，敘述略顯羅嗦。第二段心理描寫過多，雖然流暢生動，但卻使這篇考場作文超過了規(guī)定字?jǐn)?shù)，反而成為失分點(diǎn)，這一點(diǎn)要引以為戒。